The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The maps
illustate
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illustrate
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development plan which is considered for the centre of Islip, a small
town
. On the whole, what stands out from the maps is that
although
the overview of the
town
landscape is simple with some shops and houses now,
this
is expected to improve significantly by installing some facilities
along with
imprelemting
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implementing
a new
road
in the future.
To begin
with the current map, there are some shops along a main
road
acossing
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crossing
accessing
the centre line of the
town
. When we go off the main
road
towards
south
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, we can get to a school next to
housing
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the housing
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cite
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site
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, which is just west of a park. Turning to the future model, the most remarkable change will be expanding
of
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the
road
to be a dual carriageway, which is anticipated to
situmilate
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stimulate
the modernisation of the
town
.
Instead
of
this
, the current main central
road
will only allow
to be
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being
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crossed by
pedestrian
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a pedestrian
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, and on its north side, the shopping centre is planned with transportation
conveniency
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convenience
,
such
as a bus stop and car parking. As for the
south
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part of the
town
,
whereas
there
is
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likely
less
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changes compared to the north, the size of the park will be reduced
due to
the likelihood of a new housing zone
as well as
the drastic improvement of the
road
.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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