The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years

The pie charts below show the devices  people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different  years
The given two pie charts illustrate six categories of
devices
which are used by Canadian people to watch television between the 18 and 25 age group from 2009 to 2019.Units are measured in percentage. It is noticeable that the proportion of used conventional
TV
and laptop experienced a considerable fall after 10 years ,
while
this
figure for mobile phones and tablets witnessed an upward trend from 2009 to 2019.
According to
information in the first
year
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34%and 20% of the average
devices
of Canadian users rate went on conventional
Tv
and laptop .
However
, by 2019, the percentage of
devices
(conventional
Tv
and laptop) had fallen 4%and 12% respectively.
By contrast
,in terms of flat-screen
tv
,the proportion of using
this
category accounted for 8% in 2009,after 10 years,
this
figure saw a sharp increase to 27 per cent.The smallest proportion of using
devices
belonged to tablets in the first year.,
However
in 2019,there was a 14 per cent rise from 5%to 19% ,in
this
category equalled that of a tablet
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words devices, tv with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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