The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the information about sources of the police budget and the pie charts present the expenditure of the
money
in 2017 and 2018 in some
part
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parts
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of the UK.
Overall
, it can be seen that mostly the police budget was got from
national
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government and the salaries paid to officers and staff account for the majority of spending.
According to
the table, the
money
paid to police from local taxes increased to £102.3
millions
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from £91.2
millions
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in 2017,
whereas
grants gave £38.5
millions
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from £38
millions
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.
In addition
, the most amount of budget in both years was received from
national
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the national
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government with the figure
rose
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to £177.88
millions
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in 20018. Moving on to the pie chart, the highest amount of
money
distribution was occupied by officers and staff income, followed by buildings and transport, and technology. Interestingly, the proportion of
money
spent on buildings and transport is 17% over the two
period
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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