Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what mesures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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In current times, after their first ,punishment the number of crimes increases when they come out of bars. Cause of

such

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issue is the lack of rehabilitation programmes in prison and the lack of development of social and technical

skills

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during their

jail

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term. I will discuss them in an essay with appropriate solutions.

Firstly

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, the main reason behind

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issue is the lack of availability of rehabilitation programs whilst they are behind bars.

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, they are not given the opportunity to develop their social and technical

skills

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Instead

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of developing their ,

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skills

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they are involved in establishing new contacts with other criminals and after completing their term, they are going deep into

crime

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the crime

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world.

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, they have no employment opportunities when they came out of

jail

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. Take ,

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, a repast,

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obligated to write his past crime in his resume so they mostly not will fit in the job market.

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, authorities can prevent them by making and implementing laws related to

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issues.

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, the government should work on moral grounds and introduce some programmes to enhance their moral value .

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, prison management can give them training on some useful

skills

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which will help them to get employed in future when they come out of

jail

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, officers must have

checks

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for some time on their activities who are released from

jail

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in the near past. In conclusion,

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is a threatening problem but can be tackled by taking the necessary steps.

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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what mesures can be taken to tackle this problem?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people believe that professionals , such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuess both these views and give your opinion.

Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

Methods of transportation for people traveling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK.

It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc.). There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?