Some people think controls should be made for the media such as newspaper to publish other people’s private lives, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has always been debatable that a few sections of
people
consider that print
media
have a right to cover the stories
on
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celebrities
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celebrities'
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personal
life
,
while
others say that
this
is not ethical and
it
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should be monetized. In my opinion, I favour the latter perspective;
however
,
this
essay shall dwell on both viewpoints in the subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, individuals solve their issues more easily when they know other
people
cope with the same situations. To elaborate, if a famous person shows their difficulties
how
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they address them, that would not only give motivation but
also
guidelines to follow to deal with problems.
For instance
, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in Japan the
media
illustrated the whole
life
of eminent personalities with successful and failed moments.
Hence
, it puts a positive impact on
people
's
life
.
On the other hand
, showing information about someone's personal
life
has become a business these days for journalists. With the assistance
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of
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they gain audiences and proliferate the numbers of views.
For example
, nowadays once
people
famous
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on online platforms
such
as Instagram and Snapchat, the
media
go to their houses for interviews and ask questions
how
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about how
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they earn name and fame in
community
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.
Besides
this
, they
also
occasionally show unnecessary news related to
celebrities's
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celebrities
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young ones where they do study,
what
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and what
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games which they take part in.
Therefore
, the
media
should display authentic news.
To conclude
,
although
people
might learn knowledge how to tackle issues if they see the personal lives of others, I personally believe that the
media
wants
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increase the TRP of their channel.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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