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The bar chart given gives information about the figure for visiting distinct museums in London from June to October in 2021.

The bar chart given gives information about the figure for visiting distinct museums in London from June to October in 2021.
The bar chart given gives information about the figure for visiting distinct museums in London from June to October
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2021. Generally, It is noticeable that the
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number of people who visited different museums rose dramatically in August, except for Science
Museum
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.
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 the figure for British
Museum
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 saw
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 upward trend, the opposite was true for three other groups. There was a slight increase in the
visitors
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 to British
Museum
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 over the periods shown. It was a peak at 750000
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people in August.
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, the
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 to History
Musesm
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Museum
 decreased to 250000 of human, which was 500000
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people lower than
Science
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the Science
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Museum
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 in October. The National
Museum
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 stood at 180000
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the
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visitors in the final
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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