There are two line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the tuatal time of doing housework every weeks in same time.

There are two line chart diagrams depict changes that the percent of electrical appliance in households in 1920-2019 and the tuatal time of doing housework every weeks in same time.
There are two line chart diagrams
depict
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changes that the
percent
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percentage
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of electrical
appliance
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appliances
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in households in 1920-2019 and the
tuatal
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total
time
of doing housework every
weeks
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week
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in
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same
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time
. For the first line chart diagram, it is
clearly
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that the figures
about
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are about
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three kinds
electrical
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of electrical
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equipment.
To begin
with, for
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the prentage
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prentage
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parentage
percentage
of washing
machine
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machines
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, it could be noticed that there existed a slightly increased from 1920 to 1960.
Furthermore
, it increased by 30%. From 1960 to the next 50 years, it kept
steadniss
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steadiness
. What’s more, for the
perentage
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percentage
parentage
of households with
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
cauum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, as an
overall
trend, the
pretage
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percentage
of them reported climbed from 1920 to 2019. It is worth noticing that the
pretage
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prestige
portage
change of
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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was bigger than
vacuum
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a vacuum
the vacuum
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cleaner. It is clear from the data that the rate of using refrigerators had
rapid
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increased, and nearly 100
precent
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per cent
went up. The second line chart diagram represents
that
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time
of
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apply
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people
do
homework
every week. We can see that there was quickly decreased. In 1950,
people
did
homework
at
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least to spend 50 hours, and yet
people
only spent ten hours on
homework
in 2019. It was a
dramatical
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change. In conclusion, it is obvious that the
prentage
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percentage
parentage
of
household
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households
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with electrical equipment
seems
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exist the
increase
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trend.
In addition
,
people
spend
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time
on
homework
had a
go up
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trend.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, people, homework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.

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