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Many people now have the freedom to work and live anywhere because of advances in communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #freedom #work #advances #communication #technology #transportation #development
Day by day
world
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the world
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 changes with
the
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technology and it adds various
newly
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 features
for
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to
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 our lives as well.
As a result
 of that, human beings are free enough to work anywhere.
This
 affects
with
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the new modes of
transportations
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transportation
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 too. win considering the given statement, I strongly demonstrate that
advantages
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the advantages
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 of that outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. In the past, civilians were framed to a particular structure where they had Limited facilities and freedom. Mostly, humans after completing their studies
they
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were more bound to find a job opportunity in their hometown itself, Meanwhile some decided to work in a place where they had to live away from their families. With
the
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time, gradually communication became better. After introducing telephone people who lived far away could at least
here
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hear
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 they are family members, which was a great happiness for them.
Present
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 world is much
advance
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more advance
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 when compared to
past
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the past
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.Video call facilities, email, Facebook, and other social media platforms give us a considerable privilege to connect with our loved ones. If a person is away from their homeland he or she is not going to become
home sick
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homesick
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.
Advance
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Advanced
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 methods of transportation
is
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are
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 another key feature why people are more comfortable when working anywhere. Though earlier it was
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 and had given a lot of effort to travel from region to region. Nowadays
development
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the development
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 of highways,
introducing
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introduction
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Intercity
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of Intercity
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 buses,
express
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and express
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 trains with Limited destinations can make our journey fast and tired free. even travelling to another country has become much
comfortable
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more comfortable
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 with the available facilities in airports and aeroplanes. As mentioned above we can identify that it is more convenient for people to work anywhere
due to
 the positive improvements in communication and transportation. In conclusion, I would like to point out that
advantages
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the advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages when
examine
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examining
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 the above facts.
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