The government should pay for the college fees for everyone who wants to study at the University. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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educations
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is very
impotant
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important
for everyone.
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in my
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views
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government
should support
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for people who want to apply
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University.
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educations
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development will affect
to
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human
developments
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development
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in the future. On the one hand,
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for people development by
government
spend
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cost
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to university applicant for
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professional worker. And they will provide a lot of benefits
such
as project research for technology improvement and
adapt
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to use inside our
country
. That will
massive
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increase product
qualtity
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quality
quantity
and quality.
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our
country
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to get
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product output. Additional
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able to take goods profit
cost
for invest with educations for
further
.
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the other hand,
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disadvantage if a lot of budget spend and prioritize to
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the education
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system without balance to another. That will
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to
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investing and running
cost
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for
anouther
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another
department
such
as
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not
enough
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to perform current
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projects. And may impact
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long-term technology
develop
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schedule
extension
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extensions
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or
delay
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.
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this
case lead
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to
other
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way and
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of
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product grade.
Then
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impact to
country
business and world market share by
other
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another country
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country
nearby. Because
nowsday
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nowadays
products export
competion
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competition
are
very
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high and increasing trend.
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which nation without or lower technology
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is unable
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to compete with others around the world
.
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i
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strongly agree to invest at university because of
government
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primary factor to lead our
country
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country's
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development plan in the future.
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we should avoid
to unbalance
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investing
cost
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costs
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to
other department
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another department
other departments
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because
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for
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every sector is important.
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