The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Canada. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The report derives from a bar chart which illustrates of percentages of 3 different people in a northern country visited.

Overall

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the

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apply

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native Canadians,

migrants

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born from different

countries

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and

migrants

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born in English-speaking

countries

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love to visit the cinema.

On the other hand

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theatre

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the theatre

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is the least favourable place that these 3 different people

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are intrested

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intrested

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interested

to visit. Notably, people who are

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native Canadians preferred visiting

cinema

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the cinema

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as its the highest percentage by 70%,

while

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the others

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are

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only nearly

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apply

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65%. The new

migrants

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that were born in other

countries

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most

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are most

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likely to visit the library rather than other places

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apply

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showing

the

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percentage of 55%. The new

migrants

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that were born in English-speaking

countries

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preferred visiting the

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teacher

teather

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theatre

, showing 65%, followed by zoo and library

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50% and 45%, and the least

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theatre

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25%

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words migrants, countries with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

138 words

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