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MORE PEOLPLE HAVE UNHEALTHY DIET AND DO NOT DO ENOUGH EXERCIESS WHAT ARE THE REASONS FOR THIS ? HOW CAN WE ENCOURAGE PEOPLE TO HAVE A HEALTHY LIFE STYLE

#peolple #diet #exerciess #people #life #style
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Whether most
people
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 do not take healthy diets or exercise. The main reason is that the majority of individuals to love spend
time
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 on electronic gadgets and are hectic in their work, so they have unhealthy diets, but it can be solved by less use of digitalization and taking part in physical activities. Foremost, the fundamental cause of taking unhealthy diet is first place life of today numerous humans excessive use of electronic devices
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 as smartphones, laptops and many more, they do not perform outdoor tasks.
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this
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, now
people
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 have become workaholics and they hardly take their meals at the proper
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,
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 they prefer junk food as it is ready to eat it consumes less
time
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 as compared to making healthy meals by themselves.
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, a survey conducted by World
Health
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 Organization revealed that in China 65% of
people
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 do not have a balanced diet and physical activities because they are running behind to achieve success and money and
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 spend their
time
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 on technological things.
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, they are facing
health
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 ailments
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 as obesity, back pain, weak eyesight and so on. Despite the above-mentioned reasons, there are some solutions
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that
people
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 should give
time
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 to outdoor activities if they give
time
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, they would automatically take better meals which give sources of protein, carbs, fibres and vitamins with the assistance of
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 they might prevent
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health
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 issues. It not only improves physical
health
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 but
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 mental
health
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.
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, human beings need to make
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time
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 schedule
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 using handphones or computers
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 when they
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exercise in their daily routine. Once they follow
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 instruction, they may fit
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 their body.
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,
although
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 technology is popular among each and every person,
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 they love to use
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it and do not focus on well-being,
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 it can be measured by making a timetable for an optimal diet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unhealthy diet
  • exercises
  • nutritional value
  • processed foods
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • digital entertainment
  • public health campaigns
  • balanced diet
  • community-based initiatives
  • farmers' markets
  • wellness programs
  • government policies
  • subsidies
  • nutritional labeling
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