It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some
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will discuss how these two
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of
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skills are better than the ones who are not gifted. For talented
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it is easy to be good at something but if they do not polish that skill
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will be wasted.
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good
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or
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known
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.
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there is another school of thought that holds the opinion that children can be taught and they can be on the same level as the talented group. They believe that through hard work , practice and repetition, a child can be good at anything.
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tennis , roger federer was the most talented player in history. Experts said about him that he plays effortlessly. On the other another player Rafael Nadal
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through hard work and practice got more trophies than Federer. In the culmination of the above discussion , it can safely be said that even talented
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nurturing. But through hard work talent can be
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate abilities
  • genetic make-up
  • inherent aptitude
  • nurturing environment
  • rigorous training
  • proficient
  • initial advantage
  • consistent practice
  • perseverance
  • quality training
  • prodigies
  • dedication
  • long-term success
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