Some people feel that it is necessary to test new medicines on animals, while other people feel that this is not fair on animals and not necessary. Discuss both views ad give your opinion.

Although
some
people
though it is not fair to
use
animals
to test new medicines, others believe that it is vital to
use
different species to find treatment for society. I believe it is preferable to
use
animals
to find the right treatment
than
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let
people
die.
However
, many
indiviudals
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individuals
do not like the
idea
to
use
animals
because they might be
sacrified
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sacrificed
while
looking for new medicines.
Firsltly
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Firstly
, many
people
considered
animals
such
as dogs and cats as part of their family members and these
people
are willing to fight for
animal's
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animal
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rights.
Also
, they believe society is abusing
animals
to make big profits
while
producing new
drugs
that are not necessary to search for.
For instance
, in many
countries
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most
of
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the
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people
choose to be treated with
hierbs
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herbs
when they are sick because they argued that chemicals and
drugs
are harmful
for
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their bodies.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
statement because many
people
are dying from chronic diseases who might be helped by finding the right medication. The vast majority of
people
support the
idea
of using
animals
to be tested with new
drugs
and find out if these medications are safe for
humans'
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humans
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use
. More importantly, history showed us that thanks to using
animals
many
people
have
safed
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saved
their lives from diseases
such
as tuberculosis and hepatitis.
Also
, many
drugs
who
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that
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were used in
animals
sometimes were not safe to
use
on
indiviudals
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individuals
, and
this
has
lead
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to
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scientists to learn which chemicals are harmful
for
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humans. To illustrate, many years ago
people
were dying from tuberculosis and a scientist came up with the
idea
of using a new drug on monkeys, and thanks to that thousands of
people
save their lives. I believe
this
is a preferable option to
safe
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people
from drug intoxication and help those who suffer from diseases.
To conclude
,
although
using
animals
to test new medicines might sound
a
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horrific
idea
, it is preferable to
sacrify
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sacrifice
animals
than let
people
get intoxicated with
unknow
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unknown
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drugs
, so after using
animals
for trying new
drugs
, many individuals can be benefited from these practices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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