Some people believe that only pupils of similar interests should be given admissions in schools.Others are of the opinions that schools should be open to all children with varied interests. How far you agree or disagree with the above views. Give your opnion in not less than 250 words.

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of similar interests should be enrolled in academic institutes
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students
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in different
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. I am in complete favour of
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notion that school should be open to all who have
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in different fields . There are
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of reasons why
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institutions should be open to all
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students
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. First and
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, It will help in maintaining a sense of equality between all the
students
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interest
and skills in different
activities
which makes them unique from everyone .
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,if
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only
then
those
students
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in different
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students
. It would create a sense of insecurity in them which might lead to anxiety to depression .
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strengthening my views ,If institutes would be enrolling
students
with different
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it would be beneficial for them only as
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in Co-curriculum
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activies
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activities
would be able to achieve success in their life with proper guidance and teachings from
schools
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Therefore
,
schools
would be ultimately benefited from that as they would be represented by their
students
in different fields . Conclusively, It is reiterated that academic institutes should be enrolling
students
with
interest
in different
activities
as it would reduce the feelings of
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prejudice
among children and
schools
would be ultimately benefited from
this
as they will play an important role in Child's education which will benefit them in
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term as the achievements of their
students
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