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Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graphs below. You should write at least 150 words.

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The bar charts provide information about the number of mortality in 1990 and the
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 of funding for medical research in Someland, split by six different diseases (AIDS, Leprosy, Tropical Diseases, Diarrhoea, Malaria, and TB). Units are measured in millions.
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, it can be seen that the trend between those charts
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 contrary, where the most
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 of funding
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one
disease
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, lower the number of deaths in the
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. Regarding the mortality number, the most prominent cause was TB, which stood at almost two
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of
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people,
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 followed by Diarrhoea and Malaria at exactly a half
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million
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 and just under 0.5
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, respectively.
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, AIDS, Leprosy, and Tropical
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Disease
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Diseases
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 ranked
last
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 with well below 0.5
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. Turning to the
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 of funding for medical research, AIDS got the highest support with more than 150
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, after which Leprosy and Tropical
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Disease
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 had the same
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 at around 80
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.
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, Diarrhoea and Malaria had only approximately 60
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, with the least
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 TB at less than 25
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.
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