The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada netween 2015 and 2019.

The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada netween 2015 and 2019.
The
purchase
growth
of different e-commerce businesses spread
over
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2015 to 2016 is provided in the bar chart provided. Neither
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chart provide the reasons behind all these trends nor the reasons
of
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why they are not correlated
one
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another. In general, these businesses can be
devided
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divided
into two groups based on their
stability
and the highest in
growth
.
Firstly
, from the
growth
stability
tand
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stand
point,
information
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the information
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and communication type of
business
is portrayed as a
well established
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business
where it has a stable
purchase
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purchases
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in 2016, 2017, and 2019 with a total proportion of
purchase
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purchases
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of 70% in each
year
. It is followed by retail with the same feature of being steady at selling in the same
year
. Unlike the two, wholesale shows a different trend of
stability
in selling where its total
sales
per
year
tend to increase.
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business
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a business
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perspective
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it is considered stable with
tendency
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a tendency
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to increase throughout the years when
this
information
was collected.
Secondly
, with regard to the highest
in
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growth
,
information
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the information
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and communication
business
setting is considered the highest with the highest proportion of
sales
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being
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more than 70% in 2018. It is,
then
, followed by wholesale and manufacturing especially if the
year
of
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2019 is considered. These two have a proportion of
sales
approximately
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of approximately
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60%. All in all,
stability
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the stability
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and total
sales
of an e-commerce
business
matter if one has to make a decision on selecting a more profitable
business
. Based
the
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on the
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information
presented, it is sparring that a good
business
should have had
a
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much better
stability
and outstanding performance on its
purchase
as explicitly shown in the
business
setting of
information
and communications. One should aim for
such
business
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a business
show examples
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words purchase, growth, stability, information, business, year, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stability" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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