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Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Successful
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economy
 and a neat
environment
 of a
country
 are thought by some to be realizable and incompatible at the same time.
However
,
while
 I believe that being financially successful and having a
good looking
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environment
 are automatically connected, I agree that they could have become unachievable. In terms of being a financially successful
country
, the citizens are
well educated
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 persons.
For instance
 Singapore, despite their accomplishments for their
economy
, the people who live there are taking care of their own
environment
. Being socially responsible is one of the laws for any
companies
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company
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, and they must
have allocated
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 some of their income
for
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to
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 social and environmental responsibility.
On the other hand
, focusing on how to uplift a
country
’s
economy
 too much could ignore their own environmental health.
For example
, countries
who
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that
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 are successful in oil production like Iraq, Iran and Saudi Arabia, could still not know about what they are doing that can damage the climate and their surrounding
environment
. Some other industries are
also
 too busy for their own benefit without taking care of their waste. From my perspective, I could have agreed with both statements depending on which successful economic
country
 we are talking about because of their unique conditions. A case in point is France which can be both a successful
economy
 and a
neat looking
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environment
,
whereas
 in the USA, they may be successful in their
economy
 but
this
country
 is too wide that they could not take care of all of its
environment
.
To conclude
,
although
 a successful
economy
 and healthy
environment
 could be accomplished by a
country
, there are some conditions that make it not work along the way depending on how a
country
 achieves their economic success. Local governments and citizens should be more aware not only
about
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 their
economy
 but
also
their
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of their
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environment
.
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task response
Task Response: The essay partially addresses both views and provides a clear opinion. Ensure to fully explore both sides of the argument and provide a balanced opinion.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The logical structure is adequate, with a clear introduction and conclusion. Work on developing and connecting supporting ideas more effectively to improve coherence and cohesion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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