Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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Youth is
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of the most wonderful periods that
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comes through during her life.
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why a number of people say that the emotions and feelings a person experiences as a child are more important than those during studying at school, adolescence and teenage term. Others have the opposite opinion, they believe that with years people become smarter and calm,
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they can rate their actions and correct mistakes. Personally, I believe that each age, from birth to death, is essential. The opinion that a number of practices can be more beneficial and have more influence is incorrect. First of all,
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due to
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the fact that each life period has its specific features. During
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childhood
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people are more sensitive, native and active.
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why we gain knowledge and training without a clear understanding of it. Whilst in our teens and youth we become more intelligent, wiser and open-minded and that gives us a full understanding of our actions. From
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starts to eliminate his mistakes and find strong sides. Concerning the importance of gaining wisdom as a child, it is certainly true .
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, they are not more necessary than other ones.
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, as I already mentioned previously, in
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a person is more sensitive, emotional and active.
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that, understanding during
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span is more likely to make a vivid print on their worldview.
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, in
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numerous experiences can influence
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us in bad or good ways.
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, falling down from a tree can make
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fear of high.
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, having animals can
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up
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characteristics as kindness, compassion, anxiety and support.
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, each span of
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's life is relevant since with age we become smarter,
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a plethora of knowledge.
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, during
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we mostly are more emotional and interested in the outer world,
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those new knowledge influence on our future and worldview
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