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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? How can we solve this problem?

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It is worrying that
food
waste
 is a far-reaching problem in our modern society.
Although
this
 scenario has resulted from the lack of awareness and negative contributions from stores, hope can be found in the form of education and
food
waste
 fine systems.
This
 essay will first outline the underlying causes of
this
 phenomenon before suggesting some viable solutions to
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be attributed to two main reasons. One of these is insufficient knowledge. Nowadays, edible products are so over-supplied in certain areas that the public simply takes them for granted. Consumers who are responsible for worsening the problem are usually uninformed, or negligent about the matter and its consequences. These individuals tend to purchase consumables in a quantity
that is
 greater than their actual needs.
Moreover
, they possess a mindset that excessive, unneeded
food
 items can be thrown away without consequences. The increasing volume of
food
waste
 can be attributed to two main reasons. One of these is that many people are not really aware of how
food
waste
 is exacerbating environmental problems like climate change and global warming, which is possibly why they have irresponsible habits of discarding
food
.
This
 is compounded by the fact that just a limited few restaurants have regulations on customers’
food
 leftovers, like charging them extra fees if they have excessive amounts of
food
 uneaten.
As a consequence
, many individuals just discard
food
 without any hesitation, as
this
behavior
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 incurs no
further
 costs. In order to rectify
this
 situation, there needs to be educational efforts, combined with intervention in the form of financial penalties. The government should create campaigns to inform and educate the public about
food
wastage
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.
This
 possible solution will have positive effects in the long run, as more people become aware of and fight against
food
waste
. Regarding the second suggestion, businesses should be penalised if they discard too much
food
.
This
 system could
also
 be altered to apply in restaurants, aiming at guests who have unfinished dishes.
Thus
, it can be seen that
food
waste
 is the outcome of unawareness from consumers and contributions from stores.
Therefore
, there is ample evidence
to conclude
 that educational activities and penalties are urgently needed.
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