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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there are individuals who
are divide
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 into two groups. The first group believes that
space
exploration
 is
national
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a national
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 concern.
However
, the second group reckons that
this
exploration
 makes contributions to international science. Looking from my perspective, I do not have the correct answer am I agree or not with one of these groups
.
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 So in
this
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 I will
further
 explore
this
 thought-provoking question. On the one hand,
space
exploration
 has always
being
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a thing thanks to which countries can show off
theire
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their
 capabilities, power and so on. In the past different
nations
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 they did not bring together for better quality explorations. They were
as
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rivals.
For instance
, The Soviet Union and The United States. Every country did it by
theirselves
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.
As a result
, all discoveries which they got they did not share with other states .
On the other hand
, now
situation
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the situation
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 is changing. Many countries try to cooperate and share their knowledge with each other.
Also
, all
space
 laboratories are joint work of different nations.
Moreover
, today
for example
 NASA can launch to
space
 not only American astronauts. Team of the
space
 explorers can consist
people
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of people
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 from various countries from different
rigions
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regions
religions
 around the world. Personally, I consider that it is very likely that
space
exploration
 will change in the future.
Firstly
, Artificial intelligence can make a huge impact.
For instance
,
scientist
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scientists
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 can give
task
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tasks
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for
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 these robots which will have AI software.
Nevertheless
, I believe that
space
exploration
 will be less dangerous. Again, as a matter of
the
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fact that
robot
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robots
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 can replace astronauts. In conclusion, nowadays,
space
exploration
 is
multinational
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a multinational
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 effort. As well,
space
exploration
 will change in the future and it will be another way of
space
researching
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.
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