Some people believe that children should study all subjects at school, while others think they should only study subjects they are good at or find interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, there are different perspectives regarding
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education. Some sectors of society are in favour of
children
studying all the
subjects
at
school
while
others believe that it would be much better if they focus on their prominent or more
interested
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subjects
. I believe that both views have a point as I will argue in the following paragraphs. In my opinion, I am confident that
children
need to be listened
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the opportunity of learning whatever they are interested into
as well as
there are some basic
knowledge
they need to
learn
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be inserted in their societies. In the first place, teaching all the
subjects
at
school
is interesting considering the possibility of presenting to
children
diverse contents and objects of study. I think that for people who support
this
point of view, their purpose is the introduction of
children
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the world, in order
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get
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general
knowledge
related to different aspects of life
such
as maths, native and foreign
language
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languages
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and sciences. Even if it has a good purpose, we cannot deny that
this
way of thinking is obsolete as has its origins in
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Century, in which schooling was a matter of state as nations needed to dominate and organize their populations.
Likewise
, having the same educational structure two centuries after is
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proof that
this
idea is not flexible as it does not respond to the numerous demands of modern globalized societies.
On the other hand
, considering teaching
to
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children
only
subjects
that they are interested
into
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or that they are good at,
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would probably be the best way to face
this
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world.
Children
are not the same as before, and
school
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must be adapted to the new demands.
For instance
, technological advances have impacted
on
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the way how people learn, introducing them into the virtual world. Another massive change is the priority of critical thinking and learning skills over
the
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knowledge
in fact. In
this
case, it is important that pupils learn how to learn and think, using different tools to explore numerous
subjects
enjoyed by them. In conclusion, even if studying all the
subjects
at
school
bring a lot of benefits
such
as having a general idea of what objects of study are, it may not be responding to all the needs that
this
century is demanding
to
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the
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society.
In other words
, I believe that it would be better
combining
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the best variables of both sides, which is teaching
to
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children
all the elementary
knowledge
but focussing on the inclusion of technology in the classroom
as well as
the improvement of their learning skills through the approach of different motivating
subjects
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded education
  • discover their interests and strengths
  • basic understanding
  • interconnected world
  • higher motivation
  • deeper knowledge
  • mental health
  • reducing unnecessary stress
  • boredom
  • balanced approach
  • successful specialization
  • well-informed perspective
  • solid general education
  • freedom to delve deeper
  • specialized future career path
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