The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.

The charts below show the Medical research funding amount in millions of Dollars in Someland and also shows the death number for this area.
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that happen and medical
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funding in Someland 1990 based on the diseases with 2 graphs. Some well-known diseases
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included in the list,
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as AIDS, Diarrhea, Malaria, TB, Leprosy, and Tropical Diseases. In the
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data,
Tubercolosis
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Tuberculosis
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most
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deaths
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in that year, by more than 1.5
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. If we connect
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data to the medical
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funding, the many
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in TB can be caused
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very limited medical
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funds that
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to TB, with less than 50
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dollar.
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the opposite, AIDS
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acquire the most funds to conduct
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studies
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with more than 150
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dollar
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have
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low number of
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with less than 0.5
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in 1990. The disease that has the lowest number of
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is Leprosy
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has one of the biggest funds allocated to
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even more.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words deaths, research, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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