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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#information #features #comparisons
The charts show the percentage breakdown of
government
 spending across nine categories in 2000 and 2010. Over the ten-year period, there were significant changes in
expenditure
. In both years, the four largest
areas
 of
government
expenditure
 were: education, healthcare, pensions, and defence, with education taking the largest share (24% in 2000 and 21% in 2010). The smallest
areas
 of
expenditure
 were transport, culture and leisure and ‘other’. Interest
on
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 borrowing and spending on welfare lay in between. Interestingly, between 2000 and 2010, spending on all four of the largest
areas
 had dropped, with the exception of pensions, which remained the same at 19%. Spending on transport and culture and leisure
also
 fell significantly, with the transport budget declining by
two thirds
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.
On the other hand
, spending on welfare and interest on
government
 borrowing rose markedly, with the latter doubling over the ten-year period to 10%.
Overall
, the charts indicate that the
government
 has had to cut
expenditure
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 in most
areas
 in order to fund the cost of borrowing and welfare.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • pattern
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • similarity
  • difference
  • fluctuation
  • outlier
  • exception
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • data
  • feature
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