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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is undeniable that there are many spoken languages among the nations. Some specialists are convinced that
students
 should start studying a foreign
language
 at primary
school
instead
 of secondary
school
.
This
 essay will explain how the positive sides of doing so outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin
 with, learning a foreign
language
 at an early age is very easy for some primary
students
 as children are fast learners and always open to acquiring new knowledge. Since kids are less afraid of making mistakes,
this
 gives them an opportunity to use the
language
 in their daily routine without feeling embarrassed that they will speak wrongly.
Moreover
, the children’s brains are still fresh, more vocabularies could be added to their brains easily.
For example
, a half-caste baby is able to understand 2 languages spoken by his parents simultaneously within a short period of time. Despite these advantages, learning a foreign
language
 too early can
also
 have drawbacks. Since primary
school
students
 are still young, they may be forced to study another
language
 without consent.
Therefore
, they learn the
language
 without willingness which will affect the
efficient
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 of their study.
Furthermore
,
due to
 social inequality, certain parents may not have enough time to support their child
for
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 practising the new
language
 at home as they
required
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 to work for affording the family expenses. In conclusion, even though studying a foreign
language
 is difficult if
students
 do not
support
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by
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 their parents or some
students
 are not willing to study, learning a foreign
language
 since primary
school
 provides privileges for the
students
 since the children’s ability to learn is high and not going to be criticized for making errors in using
language
.
Therefore
, I believe that the advantages of
this
 phenomenon outweigh its disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Brain plasticity
  • Multicultural awareness
  • Curriculum
  • Globalization
  • Proficiency
  • Linguistic skills
  • Academic performance
  • Mother tongue
  • Bilingualism
  • Foreign language acquisition
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