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Nowdays, people live in the society where consumer goods are cheaper to buy. Do you think its advantages outweigh disadvantages ?

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Modern world live in the communities where finished
products
 are
economic
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 to buy. As far as
consumer
goods
is
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are
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concern
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, they are advantageous
interms
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in terms
 of speedy delivery, cost and ease of order and restricted
in
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respct
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respect
of
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to
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 product quality ,and lack of meeting specificity. In
this
essay
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 I will
be discussing
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aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 advantages and disadvantages and summarise my
thought
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thoughts
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 on their sustainability.
To begin
 with the benefits of
consumer
goods
,
its
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gives
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 an opportunity to save
the
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time
 , effort and money.
For instance
,
some one
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someone
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wants
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who wants
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 to get furniture for
thier
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their
 home
consumer
goods
is
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are
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 a better option.
This
 is because
prchasing
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purchasing
 wood,
further
 polishing works,
Carpentor
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Carpenter
 wages and our
time
 and thoughts required to design for the same is much
extensive
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.
In addition
 to
this
, as per our
wish
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wish,
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 final
products
 will be available on the market and will be getting immediately after payment and available for
the
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apply
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direct use.
On the other
hand
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 there are several drawbacks
for
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to
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consumer
goods
, which
includes
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include
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lack
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a lack
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 of
custom made
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custom-made
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products
 and opting
quality
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for quality
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. To illustrate
this
 ,
some body
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somebody
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who wants
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wants
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who wants
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 to make
an
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a
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wadrobe
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wardrobe
 with some specific number of shelves with
desired
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the desired
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 length is not possible with
this
 kind of instant
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product
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products
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product
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.
Also
 , the quality versus specific demand
mostly
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is mostly
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 difficult to meet.
Nonthless
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Nonetheless
,
Consumer
goods
is
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are
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aways
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always
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a
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the
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 best
options
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 for the poor ,
midle
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middle
 and upper
midle
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middle
 class families
beacuse
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because
 of
its
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 low cost, easy access,
time
 saving etc. Based on the above facts, I strongly believe the
advanges
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advantages
 of
such
products
outweighs
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 their limitations. In conclusion, the current era generation
widely
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is widely
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 towards
consumer
goods
due to
 their versatile benefits over their limitations. The key
reson
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reason
 for
such
trend
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a trend
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 is not only because of monetary benefit
,
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 but
also
gives
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a benefit
interms
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in terms
 of
time
 and energy.
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