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Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that children should NOT go to school until they are older. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is
ongoing
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an ongoing
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 debate over start teaching the
child
 earlier or later. Some people feel that early education is important,
while
 others believe that it is better to start later. Those who believe that children should start
school
 at
younger
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, there are several reasons to think so.
For instance
, if parents send their children to
school
 earlier, the
child
 begins to acquire knowledge much earlier and more than his peers.
In addition
, the
child
 will have the opportunity to finish
school
 earlier and become a university student earlier than his peers. In
additionally
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, in some
countries
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 the age for
school
 entry is 5 years,
while
 in other countries it is 7 years. Until
this
 period, children can be educated at home by their parents.
On the other hand
, of course, the naysayers have plenty of reasons, and they can cite several examples.
For example
, if a
child
 begins to be taught after an adult, the ability to accept the knowledge given to him is much more developed, and he can learn new knowledge almost without difficulty. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, there are sufficient
proofs
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 and grounds
in
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 both sides' opinions. Of course, it is good to start teaching a
child
 later, but starting education earlier plays an important role in making him a mature person. And of course, I believe that starting early education is the best way.
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