Some people believe that children should spent all of their free time with their familiae others believe that this is unecessary or even negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many individuals discuss
children
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who have spare
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and whether they should spend
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time
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with family members but others think it isn't useful and unnecessary for them. In my view,  spending
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only  with
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has a much more negative impact than positive effect on teenagers.  On the one hand ,  spending free
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with
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ensures that the child is safe . Because when
children
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have spare
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they can try to use various techniques or kitchen equipment which is Childers can not use
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as knives and  gas stoves, which has resulted in
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may be injured when using the knife and explosions may occur
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the gas being left open and in both cases the child may be injured.
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parents
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should always supervise their
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,  if
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spend their free
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with their
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they will be kind
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to their
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is because
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always want to take care of the
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they lived with. 
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, it is not very  useful to spend the
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's
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only with family. 
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they will be separate from society and maybe didn't may have any friends.Because,  they always prepare lessons
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their
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when they have
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,
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they should have discussions with their friends about different topics,
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way is more beneficial for
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.
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,
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are spending free
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only with family , which has led to them relying on these
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and even they can not decide on the simple things in the future.  So , when the
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start to grow up,  it is more beneficial for their
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to leave them to their own devices and they start making up own decisions.  In conclusion,  there are benefits for
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to spend their free
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only with family members, but in
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case, there are many negative effects on their future.
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