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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen?

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It is said that
children
 should know
difference
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the difference
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 between correct and incorrect when they are
kids
. It is added that penalty is
important
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an important
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 aspect for
kids
 to learn
this
 distinction. I do not agree with
this
 idea because
parents
 and
teachers
 ought to utilize harmless
in
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punishment in order to help
children
.
To begin
 with, some
of
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the
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people think that it is
essential
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an essential
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 aspect for
children
 to learn
positives
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the positives
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 and negatives when they are
kids
. Many
parents
 punish their
children
 with
hif
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if
 they do something wrong. Even though adults hurt their
children
 in order to punish
for
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them for
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children
's
fault
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. They think that these situations help their
children
 not to repeat.
In other words
, they believe that
kids
 are afraid of hurting
therefore
 they do not make attempts in
mistakes
.
However
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these
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 type of
the
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punishment is the cause of
a
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bad
behavior
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behaviour
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for
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in
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kids
. Because of
this
,
parents
 and
teachers
 should utilize harmless punishments for
kids
 to learn good
behaviors
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behaviours
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.
For example
, when a kid does something wrong
parents
 make them clean their rooms, pick rubbish up around the yard or not allow
to
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them to
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 play.
Parents
 and
teachers
 ought not to hurt them because
kids
 make
mistakes
 with
natural
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.
Moreover
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 adults should teach
children
 politely when they mistake.
For example
,
according to
 UNICEF, many of the young people harm from punishment when they do
mistakes
.
As a
result
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,result
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 they grow up in bad behavior in the future. In conclusion, it is said that
children
 should learn true and false things when they are very young. I disagree with
this
 idea because
parents
 and
teachers
 should use beneficial education when they make
mistakes
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral foundation
  • constructive punishment
  • physical or emotional harm
  • natural consequences
  • losing privileges
  • extra chores
  • positive reinforcement
  • time-outs
  • reflect on actions
  • open communication
  • internalize
  • role modeling
  • positive guidance
  • fear or resentment
  • alternative methods
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