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Space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year.What are the advatages and disadvantage of spending money on space exploration?

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Universe research expenses
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 an exorbitant price every year.
this
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reserchers
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researchers
. On the hand spent
money
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benifit
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benefit
benefits
 for
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goverenment
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government
.
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some
of
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money
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the money
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 on it every rich and ambitious people want
explore
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to explore
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 space but they do not
intresting
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interesting
 in only they want to be
famous
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a famous
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 person in the world .And
also
 another big reason is that all space tools are of expensive quality.Nowadays
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 a lot of
money
for
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on
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cosmos
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the cosmos
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it
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is
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beneficial
almost
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 everyone.
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 drone mammon for
cosmos
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 is not
correct
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reserchers
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researchers
.
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Because
 of nowadays everything
expensive
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 and
that is
 why a lot of people do not have any chance to
study
in addition
 to a very large amount
student
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students
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 would prefer
work
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to work
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 when they finish
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their bachelors
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bachelors
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bachelor's
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 degree .Most people can not
study
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magistrature
 since they need
to
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money
 for
continuos
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continuous
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 studying.As for space exploration
spent
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spending
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 a lot of
money
its
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is
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 just
wrong
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the wrong
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 way .So too there are few
reserchers
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researchers
in addition
 to costs high
qualification
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qualifications
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 will decrease even more. In my
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conclusion
conclution
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 everything must be cheap which of
resarch
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research
 and education .If these are developed day by day everything
become
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to
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too
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 easy in our life almost everyone
want
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wants
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 to
study
 but they are have not any
money
 for studying .And
also
everyhting
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everything
 become
to
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too
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 jitney everyone can
study
 and they can
do
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explore
easly
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easily
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