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Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men’s, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career… It is said: "A woman’s place is in the home." What do you think?

Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men’s, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career… It is said: "A woman’s place is in the home." What do you think?
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Firstly
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, the historical competition between men and
women
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 has carved strong ladies out of
women
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's characters. Men have taken major positions at work for granted as long as history went by.
Women
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, the neglected gender, must have been under pressure to show more to gain less!
That is
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 why the prime minister of Finland, the president of Brazil, and many other role models in top governmental seats are successful females now.
Secondly
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, it is the female who typically not only
give
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 birth but
also
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raise
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 the young.
Therefore
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, all educational and medical positions, like teaching and
nursings
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nursing
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, seem to be
inextricable
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 more bound to
this
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 gender. It would be the hugest of all pitty if these fabulous characteristics of ladies were overlooked, thinking of them only as housewives.
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, some traditional or conservative cults still persist that men are physically stronger,
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women
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 are gentler
at
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in
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 behaviour.
As a result
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, the male
are
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is
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 supposed to be breadwinners and the
female
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females
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homemakers
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are homemakers
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. The present-day life with the
cutting edge
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cutting-edge
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 technologies of artificial intelligence and robotics
have
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has
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 proved that
the
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apply
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physical strength is no longer a criterium for many careers
such
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 as designers or programmers. It is even possible, now, that the male be the surrogate baby carrier and give birth to babies! In conclusion, the outdated hypothesis that
women
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 have been created to stay home running household chores is to deprive all human communities of all
great
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potentials
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potential
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 that
women
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 carry.
Women
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 who just have gone through a harsh history, have made strong characters in their own. Educational and medical vocations have always been more suitable for ladies. The advent of automation has made the work
ambiance
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ambience
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 even more
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women friendly
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women-friendly
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.
Women
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 are not made to stay home ever!

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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