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Plastic bags, plastic bottles, plastic packaging are bad for the environment. what damade does plastic do to the environment? what can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

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No one can deny that the environment is a priceless treasure that should be saved. These days, many forms of
plastic
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 pollution harm our Earth.
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 essay will discuss the main negative effects that cause
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 problem and propose some possible solutions that can be taken. Disposable products
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 serious consequences on the planet. One of the most alarming ones is an imbalance in the ecosystem.
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 often happens
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 the growing amount of
plastic
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 garbage these throw inside the water and ,
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, fish will be directly harmed and poisoned.
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, every year in the summer season , several sea organisms die on the beach because of people's nylon
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.
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to reach marine plants as well.
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 there are no quick solutions to
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 growing concern, the following approaches can certainly help.
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governments can play a major role
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 the risk by introducing strict laws that criminalise
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 type of environmental abuse,
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 they give a penalty to everyone being irresponsible in the usage of
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.
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 to local authority's jobs, citizens can help by tending to use non-disposable tools made from glass, metal and paper
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 of
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 material.
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, people can replace a single-use instrument with a glass container of drink or a metal spoon. For sure that would assist in the future. In conclusion, there are several negative impacts of the problem of
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 corruption, but these can be mitigated if the aforementioned measures are adopted.
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task response
The essay addresses the main points of the prompt but lacks thorough development. The examples provided need to be more specific and relevant to the main points.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they need to be more effectively connected to the main body of the essay. Additionally, there are some coherence and cohesion issues in the main body of the essay, such as unclear connections between ideas and lack of logical progression.
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