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Some people think it is necessary to open compulsory art classes, such as painting classes; while others believe it is a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

#people #art #classes #waste #time
It is claimed that, the majority of
people
 that
art
classes
 are unnecessary, since there is no necessity of learning
paint
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to paint
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,
while
 others totally disagree with
this
 view. In my opinion,
art
 is an essential part of the country, since paintings carry history,
however
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 I agree that
art
 is necessary for us, especially for enthusiasts. To start with,
art
 is a piece of a person, by drawings
people
 can easily illustrate their mental stability or problems which disturb them. So basically, with the help of
art
people
 can recognize secrets that are hidden by the painter.
For instance
, one of the most famous paintings in the world is called "Mona Lisa" which was drawn by Leonardo da Vinci. There were many suggestions related to the painting, some
people
 assume that the painter draw a man with whom he was in love,
while
 others strongly believe that Mona Lisa is a female.
Secondly
,
art
classes
 develop imagination skills, which is beneficial for youngsters to have fun and create fine
art
.
On the other hand
,
art
 is one of the hardest things to appreciate, since not all
people
 are in charge of joining
art
classes
.
Furthermore
,
art
 attracts
people
 with a high tendency for it as it requires patience and interest. A recent study that was conducted in the USA showed that children who participated in painting
classes
 were able to overcome stage fright
To sum up
,
art
 is an important subject and it should be thought in school . only through
art
 students can acquire skills
such
 as creative thinking, problem-solving, non-variable communication and much more.
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