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SOME PEOPLE FEEL THAT THERE SHOUD BE A FIXED PUNISHMENT FOR EACH TYPE OF CRIME. OTHERS Thought THAT THE CIRUMSTANCES OF AN OFFENCE SHOULD BE TAKEN IN TO ACCOUNT WHEN DECIDING ON A PUNISHMENT. DISCUSS BOTHE SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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It is undeniable that
due to
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poverty, and social
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, the number of
crimes
 are rose in certain nations.
While
 some individuals believe that
a
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punishment
 for each crime's category should be fixed.
Conversely
, there are those
poeple
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people
 who think that a
punishment
 should be considered case by case.
This
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 will discuss both
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 of
views
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 in detail
along with
 my personal perspective.
To begin
 with, determining a fixed
punishment
 for
crimes
 is impartial as all
people
 will receive the same penalty without racism or inequally in
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society.
As a result
,
this
 will dramatically
decrese
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decrease
process
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 time of judgement since
debating
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 in a court is no longer necessary. When someone doing
crime
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 the police just arrest them in
a
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prison for a
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 time.
On the other hand
, it is understandable for some to believe that the
punishment
 should be judged by cases.
This
 is probably
becuase
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because
 each criminal has
distingusihed
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distinguished
intention
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intentions
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 when performing a crime
for
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 example,
individual
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an individual
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 killed
people
 by his
attentions
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while
other
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 killed by accident.
Therefore
, the
punishment
 should not
be resemble
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for
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this
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 two criminals since they have different's killed
purpose
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purposes
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 and they are in
the
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different
situation
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situations
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 and
circumstance
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circumstances
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. In my perspective, I strongly believe that each type of
crimes
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 should be determined
the
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approximately
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punishment
 as
people
 will
conscious
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be conscious
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 of how hard the
punishment
are
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 and avoid performing
crimes
.
However
, justices and juries should
also
 consider whether each criminal should obtain the same
punishment
. In conclusion,
after
this
 essay has manifested the above-mentioned points, it can be reiterated that many
people
 think that criminals have to
recieve
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receive
 a general and fixed
punishment
. Eventually, I am convinced that each case has its own
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