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In some countries owning a home rather than renting own is very important for people. What might be the cause? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

#countries #home #people #situation
The diagram gives
information
 about how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology forecasts the weather by congregating up-to-date data.
Overall
,it is seen that the
information
 mainly comes from a
satellite
.The broadcast news is
also
 shown in different ways(newsreader and recording).
Firstly
,radar collects
information
 that comes from a
satellite
.When the data is reached,it can be transferred in different ways one of which is through drifting a buoy.Before being shown on a special computer,the
information
 from a
satellite
 goes through the
satellite
 photo.
In addition
 to
this
,the data
also
 goes through a radar screen and synoptic chart from radar and buoy respectively.
Further
 analyzing the diagram,before being shown to the public,the broadcast with forecasts is prepared.
Lastly
,the gathered
information
 about the weather is shown on TV newsreader.
However
,it can
also
 be heard on the radio or in recorded announcements.
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