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The below graph shows the population of Japanese in the past, present, and future trends and table informs the number of people aged over 65 years old in 1950, in 2005, in 2035, and 2055

The below graph shows the population of Japanese in the past, present, and future trends and table informs the number of people aged over 65 years old in 1950, in 2005, in 2035, and 2055
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The given bar chart illustrates numbers of
people
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 trends
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 the table shows percentages of
Japanese
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 elderly getting over 65 years. Both of them collected data from the year 1955 and
then
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 forecasted to the year 2055.
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, the total occupants of
Japanese
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people
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 increased gradually from 1950 to hit a peak in 2005.
otherwise
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, after 2005 the community of
Japanese
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 old
people
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 slightly increased, and
this
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 condition will be experienced until 2055. Looking into detail, it is apparent that Japan's
people
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 after World War II have grown constantly. Starting with 84.1
million
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people
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 in 1950, the number of residents rose to 126.9
million
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 in the new millennium.
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 hit its peak in 2005 with 127.8
million
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people
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, and after that slightly declined to 127.1
million
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 in 2010.
Next,
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predicting in 2055 the total population of
Japanese
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 is just around 89.9
million
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.
In Contrast
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, the number of elderly in Japan rose since 2005. By 1950 Japan only had 4.1
million
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people
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 aged over 65 years,
whereas
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 there was a significant increase to 25.7
million
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 in 2005 (20%). Forecasting in 2035 the proportion will be increasing to 37.2
million
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 (34%) and 36.5
million
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 (41%) in 2055.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, japanese, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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