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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (medical treament). Do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some that
price
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 is the key factor to consider before purchasing a product or
sevices
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service
services
.
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i
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 agree with
this
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 statement,
i
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also
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 believe
quality
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 is another important point to consider. There is no doubt that most consumers nowadays would compare prices of the items and
services
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 before they decide which to go for. The reason behind
this
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practice
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 is
because
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that
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 there is
limited
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a limited
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 amount of money
that is
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 available for spending for each and every household.
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, it is
crusial
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crucial
 for
one
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 to consider the
price
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 of items and choose the
one
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 with the most reasonable
price
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.
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, prices
prices
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of soda drinks produced by different manufacturers may differ considerably, and
one
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 might go for the cheaper
one
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, which in turn will
helps
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 in
term
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 of reducing
financial
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the financial
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 burden and the extra money saved could be used for
other more important purpose
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another more important purpose
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.
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,
quality
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 is another important reason dictating consumer direction in the market. It is a common
believe
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 that the higher the
quality
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a
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of a
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product/
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services
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service
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, the higher the cost of acquiring them, because of certain good features of these products
such
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 as longer durability, and better
services
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.
For example
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, medical treatment in a renowned
consultant led
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 hospital would cost higher than the same treatment in
the
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government run
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 smaller hospital.
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, some of the advanced medical treatments may not be
radily
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readily
 available in the smaller hospital.
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 it is logical for the consumers to choose the higher
quality
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services
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 despite
of
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the higher cost. In conclusion,
although
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i
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I
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 agree that
price
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 is the most important factor in consumer spending,
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quality
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the quality
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 of a product/
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services
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service
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 is an equally crucial factor that will affect spending.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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