Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Small
group of people think that it is more Add an article
A small
advantages
to play sports in a group like football. Replace the word
advantageous
On the other hand
and other group
of people think that it is beneficial to play individual Change the wording
another group
other groups
sport
. For
example
tennis Add a comma
,example
where as
in my opinion, Correct your spelling
whereas
hear
a person may take part in Correct your spelling
here
team
Add an article
a team
sport
or an individual sport
, depending on personality rather than its advantages over other
.
Playing Fix the agreement mistake
others
sport
require
hard work and enthusiasm and Change the verb form
requires
individual
playing a game Correct article usage
an individual
in
Change preposition
with
bunch
of people should be familiar with Add an article
a bunch
team work
and should have a high understanding level. Being a part of Correct your spelling
teamwork
community
improves personality and behaviour. Correct article usage
a community
Team
members connect with each other and have good communication skills. Having a supportive nature, benefits the team
for example
soccer is a sport
of team
play on the other hand
, single
win takes place in and non-Correct article usage
a single
team
-based sport
player. Having poor soft skills can even excel in this
type of sport
health of an individual remains at an optimum level, due to
body movements. Independently scored scores over opposite player make a win. Example
to be given of a tennis Correct article usage
An example
sport
is the best.
To summarise the above sport
mentioned though differ in their principle, but
have almost Correct word choice
apply
same
benefits Correct article usage
the same
while
talking about personality development. It is better enhanced by team
sport
.Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
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