Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Small
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group of people think that it is more
advantages
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to play sports in a group like football.
On the other hand
and
other group
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another group
other groups
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of people think that it is beneficial to play individual
sport
.
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example
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tennis
where as
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whereas
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in my opinion,
hear
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here
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a person may take part in
team
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a team
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sport
or an individual
sport
, depending on personality rather than its advantages over
other
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others
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. Playing
sport
require
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hard work and enthusiasm and
individual
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an individual
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playing a game
in
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with
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bunch
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a bunch
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of people should be familiar with
team work
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teamwork
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and should have a high understanding level. Being a part of
community
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a community
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improves personality and behaviour.
Team
members connect with each other and have good communication skills. Having a supportive nature, benefits the
team
for example
soccer is a
sport
of
team
play
on the other hand
,
single
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win takes place in and non-
team
-based
sport
player. Having poor soft skills can even excel in
this
type of
sport
health of an individual remains at an optimum level,
due to
body movements. Independently scored scores over opposite player make a win.
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to be given of a tennis
sport
is the best. To summarise the above
sport
mentioned though differ in their principle,
but
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apply
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have almost
same
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the same
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benefits
while
talking about personality development. It is better enhanced by
team
sport
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sports
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  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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