The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables illustrate the number of sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas between 1999 and 2004 in five European countries, comprising the UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden. The figure
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given in millions of
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, it can be seen that mostly the sale of coffee and bananas had increased over the period shown in the question and the biggest sales accounted for the UK. Apparently, the amount of selling coffee in England had
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almost 20 times which is a tremendous growth.
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, Switzerland
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grew 3 times with the figure being 6 million
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euros
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in 2004,
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there were a minimal increase in Denmark and Sweden only 0.2 million
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euros
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. Moving on to the bananas table, the highest revenue was occupied by
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England throughout the period, 1999 and 2004, with 15
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of
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euros
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and 47
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of
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euros
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respectively.
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, Belgium and Sweden were the two countries
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the money had declined.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words euros with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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