the diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies
The given diagrams show the stages that are followed to produce Frozen Fish pie.
Overall
, by and large, there are two main phases: the first is to manufacture the Linking Words
potatoes
and the second is to have a package which is frozen (containing vegetables and salmon) and store them before sending them to delivery.
First of all, the Use synonyms
potatoes
are brought up to thirty days and the first step starts by washing them carefully after that the peeling stage is allocated between cleaning and cutting. Obviously, the phase is slicing the Use synonyms
potatoes
into fingers shape. Noticeably that the following procedure is to boil the Use synonyms
potatoes
before refrigerating them. The final step here is to store Use synonyms
potatoes
in packets.
The second main phase begins with squeezing lemon over fresh salmons and adding salt Use synonyms
then
cooking them using a steam oven. Linking Words
It is clear that
skins and bones are moved by some workers. Linking Words
Furthermore
, the production is checked by inspection staff. The following stage is adding prepared peas, sauce and Linking Words
potatoes
that have been prepared previously to the production. Use synonyms
Finally
, The manufacturing is finished with wrapping and sending the products to refrigerators and storing them.Linking Words
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