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The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.

The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the begining.
#line #amount #coffee #brazil #colombia #costa #rica #glance #exports #capacity
The line graph illustrates the amount of coffee
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was
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exported from three different countries especially
in
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Brazil, Colombia, and Costa Rica between 2002 to 2012, over
the
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10 year
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10-year
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 period. A graph indicates that the exports have consistently grown in volume from the outset.
Overall
, all countries experienced an upward trend
in
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 the end of the period. Another
experienced
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 for the most significant growth was examination in
brazil
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Brazil
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 In 2002, Costa Rica had the highest figure in exporting coffee at 15
million
.
Then
, it fluctuated over the period and reached 20
million
 in 2012.
In contrast
, Brazil experienced a steady rise until
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a decline in 2008 at approximately 16%. After
leveling
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 off at a low point, it saw a rise in 2012 and became the highest at 25
million
. One prominent feature of
this
 date is Colombia had the smallest figure at 5
million
 in 2002. There was
then
 a surge until 2006
,
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 when about 14
million
 kilograms of coffee was exported from Colombia.
Thereafter
, the figure plunged until 2008 and
then
 observed a dramatic increase in 2012, about 4
million
 kilograms and 15
million
 kilograms respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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