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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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 and engineers work after training have a debate. Many individuals believe that the
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there. Others argue that they make
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 the place by themselves would be good for
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 path and help many people in the world. The
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country
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is the best choice. Because they believe that the academic programs just be designed
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 the other hand,
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poor nations
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residents were not
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 to school, so they do not how to treat and prevent the pandemic. Doctors give them the methods
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 protect their
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by
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knowledge
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 that they learn
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 courses. These jobs not only
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 to the other
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 well-being. In conclusion, the countries where
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 on what they learn and benefits from their knowledge. "
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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