Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is sometimes argued that many individuals think particular
occations
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occasions
such
as doctors and engineers should
be
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work
as
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volunteer
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in other nations
while
others believe that it is unnecessary. In my opinion, I partially agree with these ideas. On the one hand, there are several reasons why some professionals should devote their skills to another
country
.
Firstly
, in some nations especially develop countries
such
as South Africa,
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Pakistan
suffer
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from lack
experts
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who
work
in
medical
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sector.
Secondly
, it helps develop skills in another
country
which
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with
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people
's life because a huge amount of
people
in the world can not access
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proper treatment in the hospital and it will save those lives.
Lastly
, it gives hope to
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the citizen
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who lives in
develop
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country
.
This
is because they have no opportunities
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learn particular jobs and it allows them to learn new skills and improve their
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limitations
.
On the other hand
, In my opinion, they should not
to
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work
without payment. One of the main reasons can be that if they
works
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as
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, they may feel
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and they do not find motivation. Normally, money is
people
's motivation because those workers devote their life
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years to training and studying. Another reason is that they should leave
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their kith and kin for a long time because normally it takes at least
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months if
people
wants
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work
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in
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abroad.
In addition
, there
are
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risky
work
in
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far from their own places
such
as local disease and
home sickness
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. In conclusion,
although
some jobs which are related
in
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people
's life should
work
in another
country
, I believe that we should carefully consider
about
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this
idea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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