Small shops in towns and villages are closing and are being replaced by big stores. Do you think it is a good or a bad trend? Explain your opinion.

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modern world, a new
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is
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started by
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in which they open big and new
stores
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in local areas which results in ending of small shops.
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essay includes my opinion, that it is not a good
trend
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as humankind in local regions faces so many issues just because of these big
stores
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.
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with, these days it become so hard for
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to afford things as everything is getting more and more expensive. To elaborate on
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, humans who
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in small villages hardly earn much.
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also
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they
dont
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don't
have enough money to support their livelihood.
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, if these small
stores
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get replaced by huge shopping places, it will become so hard for them to survive.
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,
i
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myself reside in a town where it is very hard to afford
basic
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the basic
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necessities of daily life. In accordance with our
pocket
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we can only buy things from these small
stores
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.
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to
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, another reason that
support
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my opinion is that
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trend
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can bring
unemployement
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unemployment
for small shopkeepers. It is not easy to look for a new job opportunity in areas where there is already unemployment or less growth.
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, the
people
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who run these
stores
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earn money only through these sources.
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, they
dont
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don't
earn much from these
stores
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but whatever
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they
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get is sufficient for them
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for their family.
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, if a store gets closed only because of
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new
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, it will create so many difficulties for the owner of that small shop.
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he will have nothing left and that person have to find another new earning option which is very tough to look for in small regions. In my opinion,
stores
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in small
town
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towns
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and cities should not be replaced by new and big shops as it will bring unemployment for local humans
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people
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who belong to these local places will
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find difficulties in their living. Nobody should close these small
stores
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, new and big
stores
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can be opened but only without closing these local
stores
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. In
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way
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it is good for everyone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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