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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
Nowadays, many
people
 in some countries are growing interested in looking
for about
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 the
history
 of the
house
 or building in which they live. I think the main reasons for
this
 are
safety
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 and
comfortable
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, and
the
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human curiosity
,
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 and it certainly needs to be dealt with. One reason why
people
 are learning about the
history
 of their
home
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homes
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 or
building
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buildings
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 they lived
is
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 the
safety
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 and
comfortable
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for
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 living in their
house
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.
People
 want to know if the
house
 is still fit and appropriate for
live
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, are the building structures strong enough, or
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 materials have been already old and broken. If the
house
 building structures have already been old, they can re-building the
house
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new materials to be stronger.
Furthermore
,
people
 might be looking for
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information
 about the family, communities, or organizations who lived
that
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 building in the past, or what the purpose of the operation or living in that building
.
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 It is because humans have
sense
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 of curiosity to get
deeply
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information
 and understanding, and
this
 sense will be
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 for taking the following actions. To research the
history
about
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 their living building,
people
 can gather
information
 from the
neighborhoods
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due to
 they were usually having
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relationship
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relationships
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 with the
people
 who lived in the building in the past.
In addition
,
neighborhoods
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 indirectly
known
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 the surrounding environments and situations by observation or
words
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 of mouth. In conclusion, the reasons behind many
people
 are getting attracted
in
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 looking for
about
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the
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information
of
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 the
house
 or building in which they live include safety and comfortable for living and
the
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 sense of curiosity, and
possible
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 alternative for
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finding out about the
history
 is gathering
information
 from the
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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 who lived near the building.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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