The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The given diagram illustrates the process by which
sugar
is produced. In general, there are seven steps in the process, from growing Use synonyms
sugar
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cane
to drying and cooling the Use synonyms
sugar
in the container.
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The first step is
that the Linking Words
sugar
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cane
is grown for a specific period of time, about 12 to 18 months. Use synonyms
The next step is
picking it, either by a farmer or by a tractor. After that, the Linking Words
sugar
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cane
is crushed under high pressure by a mechanical machine that produces Use synonyms
juice
from the Use synonyms
sugar
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cane
. In the fourth stage, the Use synonyms
juice
is purified by a limestone filter, which means that Use synonyms
sugar
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cane
becomes liquid Use synonyms
after
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The fifth step is evaporation, in which the Linking Words
juice
is heated in a container. Use synonyms
Then
, after a Linking Words
while
, the Linking Words
juice
becomes syrup, Use synonyms
after
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this
point, Linking Words
sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup by turning the ventilator which name is the centrifuge. Use synonyms
Finally
, the Linking Words
sugar
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cane
is put into the container until they become dry and cool.Use synonyms
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