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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in foreinge country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

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Some individuals claim that acquiring a foreign
language
 is only needed for travelling and working,
whereas
 others believe there are
plethora
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 of other reasons
beside
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 these two.
This
 essay will first shed
a
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light on both standpoints and
then
 decide which one suits the reality the most. Learning a new
tongue
 is essential in order to visit other nations and get a decent job, which
are
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 often considered to be the only factors that impose people to do so.
That is
 to say that the majority bother about it only when their mother
tongue
 is not widely used there.
For instance
, a lot of tourists from Russia visiting Kazakhstan demonstrate apparent
nonchallance
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nonchalance
 about the local
language
 because there is a tremendous diaspora of Russians living there.
On the other hand
, there can be myriads of other incentives for people to learn another
tongue
. To commence, seldom do studies regarding certain cultures attain their onset goals without trying to comprehend native languages. Not only does
language
 provide scholars with valuable data like
slangs
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 and
nation's
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 ancient terminology, but
also
 a description of local traditions.
Moreover
, it is crucial for one to acquire a local
tongue
 prior to
permanentally
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permanently
 moving
into
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foreign
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a foreign
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 country.
For example
,
person
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a person
the person
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 has to cooperate with his or her neighbours, who most likely would know nothing but their mother
tongue
.
Overall
, having considered distinctive interests, it is irrefutable to say that learning a foreign
language
 has many other approaches than working and travelling and restraining factors only around these two flatly contradicts the reality.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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