The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars)

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars)
The table illustrates the amounts of
investiments
Correct your spelling
investments
investment
into developing
countries
from some developed parts of the world, including
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
show examples
and
EU
Correct article usage
the EU
show examples
, between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
, what stands out from the table is that
although
there was a drop in the middle year of the given period, the total financial help for
countries
on
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
poor basis increased throughout the half of the decade. Meanwhile,
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
show examples
invested by
far
Add an article
the far
show examples
amount of
moeny
Correct your spelling
money
compared to
EU
Correct article usage
the EU
show examples
and the total of other developed
countries
.
To begin
with
Add a comma
,with
show examples
the total figure,
while
 it started from 15.7
million
dollars
in the initial year, it steadily climbed up to exceed 20
million
dollars
between 2007 and 2008,
thus
eventually it recorded 28.1
million
dollars
in the final year, 2010. As for the country which contributed the increase the most, namely USA,
although
their first number, 9.8
million
dollars
, was already much higher in comparison with other regions, it went up by 7.2
million
dollars
within only
following
Correct article usage
the following
show examples
two years.
Although
it witnessed a minor dip, which affected the total amount, in 2009, it recovered the momentum to finish up with 20.3
million
dollars
, which was quite near twice as much as its original.
On the other hand
,
EU
Correct article usage
the EU
show examples
and other
devepoled
Correct your spelling
developed
countries
also
financially
suppoered
Correct your spelling
supported
poorly
florished
Correct your spelling
flourished
countries
, if not
the
Change preposition
to the
show examples
same extent as
US
Correct article usage
the US
show examples
did. Their figure began
from
Change preposition
at
show examples
3.1 and 2.8
million
dollars
and ended up at 4.1 and 3.7
million
dollars
with gradual growth, respectively.
Submitted by lisa_smile_2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, million, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: