In some countries, there are many social problems involving teenagers. This is because parents spend much of their time at work not at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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have many social problems including teenagers.

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happens because parents spend much of their time at work not at home.In my point of ,view both of them have their rights.

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age they start to create things.They start to create new friends or maybe lovers even if they are at young age.For ,example when you are a teenager you can't think well

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but when the time goes by you feel sorry about what you did. On the other ,hand parents work and spend their time at work but that thing

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In some countries, there are many social problems involving teenagers. This is because parents spend much of their time at work not at home. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Governments should speand money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people say that a country should produce food locally, while others believe that it is good to import food. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

Some working parents think that childcare centres provide the best care for children who are still too young to go to school. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their children.

Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the advantages and disadvantages that bring to them

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.