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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The bar graph displays the time spent on calls in the U.K. on three modes of communication in the given
period
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 from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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,Local calls were the most popular throughout the entire
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,with national and international calls and calls on mobile second and third respectively.
however
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,
minutes
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 spent on mobile calls increased dramatically in the whole
period
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,
thus
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 narrowing the gap between other categories by 2002.
Minutes
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 spent on local calls fluctuated throughout the entire
period
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 with just over 70
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995, peaking exactly at 90
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minutes
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 in 1999
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 steadily decreasing to just over 70
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 in 2002. National and international calls increased steadily year on year,from just under 40
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 to a peak of nearly 60
billion
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 in 2002.mobile
minutes
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 increased rapidly from approximately 3
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 in 1995 to around 45
billion
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 in 2002.Mobile phone usage nearly doubled from approximately 22
minutes
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 in 2000 to 40
billion
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 in 2001.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • lack of physical interaction
  • try or test products
  • potential for fraud or scams
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