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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the acedemic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #acedemic #world
Sharing
information
 is good for the general
knowldge
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knowledge
 of a person. Everyone should know what is going on around them.
This
 essay
completly
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completely
 agrees with the statement that
people
 should share all the
information
 regarding scientific research, business and
academic
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 world. We shall discuss
this
 in detail in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
information
 sharing is really easy these days.
People
does
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 not have to spend money to send
information
 through newspapers or via mail. there are hundreds and thousands of
people
 on
internet
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, just
on
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a click knowledge can
shared
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share
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though
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through
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 social media
for example
 Instagram,
facebook
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Facebook
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,
twitter
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 and many more.
Also
,
sharing
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by sharing
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 the update about any research,
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a business
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business
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businesses
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 can educate
people
 about what
us
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is
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 happening around and
this
 will
also
 give some tips to a person who is looking for ways to grow their own
buisness
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business
.
For example
, there are
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of famous personalities on social media to guide and prepare
new
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a new
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 generation for their
sucessful
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successful
 future.
Further
, more educational
information
 can help
young
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the young
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 generation to decide what they want in their future.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that
information
 should not be shared as it is too valuable. In
this
 era, we have
alot
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a lot
 of
competion
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competition
 among
people
 in almost every sector of life. Nobody wants someone else to be above them. And in some
cases
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people
 are scared to release the
information
 because they think that it might be not
right
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the right
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information
, as they do not want to be responsible for anything. In the epilogue, sharing
information
 can help increase our
knowlegde
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knowledge
 and we get to know more than what we know already.
Whereas
, if we do not share and keep it to ourselves, we will be holding only
the
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 certain amount of
information
. So, spreading knowledge has more
benefit
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benefits
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 rather than not sharing.
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